Bahir holem 3
Amar ei shoke gora drishyoloke,
Sararat cheye thaki mugdho chokhe.
Angule akre rekhe bartho tuli,
Keno je ei behisheber khata khuli!
Chorie jai pot jure tar bimurtota,
Aakapot murti gorar bastobota.
Gore die more jabar sarthokota.
Konodin tuli kolom shikey tule,
Rong chere bhabguloke gule gule,
Asthane chitie berai bhabukota.
Drishyapote ugre deoar okkhomota.
Eka eka shoe jaoar nirjonota.
Mukto chorai uluboner kone kone,
Bela jai office ghore swapna bune.
posted by shatarupa @ 9:42 PM
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Eti besh bhalo,tobe chhondo melate giye kothao bhabke simito korbar ekta anichhakrito chesta lokhhyo kora jachhe.
Tobe ei bastobjontronata khub sundarbhabe expressed, ebong sobseshe Adbhut akta positive message kobitatike alada matra diyechhe.
Positive message dite cheyechilam,sesh rokhha hoi ni.Ulubone mukto chorano to barthotai.Tai na?Eta ekta soukhin onoton,tai chondo die halka korar cheshta korechi.
Tobu ei realizationtai to positive.Pathok hisebe amar tai mone hochhe.:)
Seta bhabini.Thanks.
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khub helafela kore ichchhemoto lekha mone, tao deep ebong sundar.ar khub fresh.etai arektu jotno niye likhle na jani ki hoto!:-)
tor kobita e chhanda ekta boro plus point,tai arektu kheyal rakhish.kothao kothao kete jachchhe.the rhythm between lines is visible and can be easily maintained.But the rhtyhm between paras?kobita ta te chhonder ekadhik pattern eshechhe:
aa
bb
cc
d
---- para--
aa
bb
d
----para--
aa
eta na kore jekono ekta pattern repeat kore ja, onek strong hobe.
rirongsha,bujhte parchi.Moner bhab o tar bohiprokash er sothik synchronization obhayash sapekkho kaj.Ami jotno nebo.
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